Thursday, October 15, 2009
THESIS PARAGRAPH
A strange phenomenon has swept the University of Central Florida; skateboarders are taking over the sidewalks and streets, running over passersby and creating injuries. I have experienced this first hand after being almost run over by a skateboarder. The big problem is that UCF students are being injured and walkers are being knocked off the sidewalk. Even though this situation is potentially dangerous, I understand skateboarders need a way to get around on this ginormous campus; prehaps there is a fix. After noticing this phenomenon, five questions have arised. The first being how many injuries have skateboarders caused? The next being, how do other students feel about this trend? That will lead me into my third question; how many people has this occurred to? Who is at fault, the walker or the skateboarder? And the last question to ponder is… Is there a fix to this problem? I noticed this trend one day while I waited for my friends in front of the Student union.
Tuesday, October 13, 2009
commentary outline
COMMENTARY OUTLINE:
I. INTRO:
a. I will give you background about how I came to notice that skateboarding became a pattern.
(why I think this is important)
b. I will then give an outstanding thesis that will give you insight into what this trend signifies.
c. I will then give you an overview of the questions I am going to ponder.
QUESTIONS:
How many injuries are caused by skateboarders?
How do other people feel about this situation?
How many other people has this occurred to?
When this situation happens, who is at fault?
Is there a fix to this problem?
II. PARAGRAPH 1:
MAIN POINT: INJURIES AND HOW MANY PEOPLE THIS HAS HAPPENED TO.
a. I will tell you about how I interviewed a group of people and asked them if this problem has happened to them.
b. I will also give research I have found about home many people (skateboarders and walkers) have been injured because of skateboarding.
III. PARAGRAPH 2:
MAIN POINT: HOW DO OTHERS FEEL ABOUT THIS TREND
a. I will interview a random group to see how people feel about this situation.
IV. PARAGRAPH 3:
MAIN POINT: WHO IS AT FAULT AND IS THERE A FIX?
a. I will interview and give you the results as to how many campuses have banned skateboarding (is that a fix)
b. and how many people think skateboarders or walkers are at fault.
V. CLOSE:
a. In the conclusion I will repeat my intro questions
b. Then I will state my results
I. INTRO:
a. I will give you background about how I came to notice that skateboarding became a pattern.
(why I think this is important)
b. I will then give an outstanding thesis that will give you insight into what this trend signifies.
c. I will then give you an overview of the questions I am going to ponder.
QUESTIONS:
How many injuries are caused by skateboarders?
How do other people feel about this situation?
How many other people has this occurred to?
When this situation happens, who is at fault?
Is there a fix to this problem?
II. PARAGRAPH 1:
MAIN POINT: INJURIES AND HOW MANY PEOPLE THIS HAS HAPPENED TO.
a. I will tell you about how I interviewed a group of people and asked them if this problem has happened to them.
b. I will also give research I have found about home many people (skateboarders and walkers) have been injured because of skateboarding.
III. PARAGRAPH 2:
MAIN POINT: HOW DO OTHERS FEEL ABOUT THIS TREND
a. I will interview a random group to see how people feel about this situation.
IV. PARAGRAPH 3:
MAIN POINT: WHO IS AT FAULT AND IS THERE A FIX?
a. I will interview and give you the results as to how many campuses have banned skateboarding (is that a fix)
b. and how many people think skateboarders or walkers are at fault.
V. CLOSE:
a. In the conclusion I will repeat my intro questions
b. Then I will state my results
Thursday, October 8, 2009
10 Question Interview
Kellsey said:
1. How many injuries are caused by skateboarders? Probably a lot becuase I see so many people get run over everyday
2. How do other people feel about this? I feel annoyed. This happens to me all the time.
3. Is there a fix? To take skateboards away, Im tired of getting run over!
4. Who is at fault? The skateboarders!
5. How many people has this occured to? Everyone!
6. How do you know what you know? (evidence) It has happened to Kellsey herself and a lot of people just in our class. By watching people on campus I also witness this going on.
7. Who are you to the subject? (perspective) A victim
8. How is this event connected to other events? (patterns or opposing forces) This event is connected to bicycle riders and walkers because people get run over by bike riders, too.
9. What if things were different? (suppositions/predictions)If things were different there might be less anxiety on campus. People wouldnt have to watch their backs constatnly.
10. Why is this important? (significance) This is important because it happens on campus daily and is dangerous. This should be looked at to better the situation.
1. How many injuries are caused by skateboarders? Probably a lot becuase I see so many people get run over everyday
2. How do other people feel about this? I feel annoyed. This happens to me all the time.
3. Is there a fix? To take skateboards away, Im tired of getting run over!
4. Who is at fault? The skateboarders!
5. How many people has this occured to? Everyone!
6. How do you know what you know? (evidence) It has happened to Kellsey herself and a lot of people just in our class. By watching people on campus I also witness this going on.
7. Who are you to the subject? (perspective) A victim
8. How is this event connected to other events? (patterns or opposing forces) This event is connected to bicycle riders and walkers because people get run over by bike riders, too.
9. What if things were different? (suppositions/predictions)If things were different there might be less anxiety on campus. People wouldnt have to watch their backs constatnly.
10. Why is this important? (significance) This is important because it happens on campus daily and is dangerous. This should be looked at to better the situation.
Wednesday, October 7, 2009
Letter to a Friend (500 words)
Dear Courtney,
Things are so different here at UCF than back home. It is a huge campus and people are always rushing around the place. Just the other day at the student union I almost got run over by this guy on a skateboard. I was very startled by the boy and I didn’t know how to react, I am sure you can imagine my clumsy self trying to dodge a skateboard. First you have to understand what the student union feels like to me. It is swarming with people rushing around and it is almost impossible to walk without hitting someone. This is a given that if you are skateboarding, you are probably going to hit someone. Even though the student union is a huge space, it feels so incredibly small with all of the people around you. Anyway, the poor guy looked so embarrassed. I would have been to if I almost ate concrete in front of everyone! After the incident I started wondering… How many injuries are caused by skateboarders? I would think quite a few because that same day I saw skateboarders run into multiple walkers. I understand the campus is so big and spread out and a skateboard helps to be on time to class but I feel it’s not hard to look out for people who are walking. You might also be thinking… How do other people feel about this situation? My friend Kellsey said she felt annoyed at the situation because she almost got crushed twice in one day. Can you believe that? Just walking around and almost getting run over, not ONCE but TWICE in just one day. During the situation at the student union, I saw the faces of the passersby and noticed people weren’t surprised by the situation. I was wondering how many other people this occurred to so I began asking people in my English class. Multiple people said they have experienced being chased off the sidewalk by skateboarders. In one case, someone had tire marks on their foot. Then I started thinking… When this situation happens, who is at fault? It’s hard to say because the sidewalk is for everyone. Skateboarders should look out for walkers because sometimes they come right from behind you so the walkers can’t see them. Skateboarders could give a warning instead of creeping up for behind you. I feel sometimes they scare you on purpose. I was thinking, is there a fix to this problem? Could there be a division in the sidewalk for walkers and skateboarders? In some places there is a different section of the road for bicycles could there be added room for skateboarders? I think if there was a fix to this problem, this would be the way to fix it. UCF couldn’t ban skateboarding, people have to be able to get around someway and it would be very unfair to say skateboarders couldn’t get around the way they choose. Don’t forget, UCF is a very spread out campus and walking from one end to the other takes a while.
Things are so different here at UCF than back home. It is a huge campus and people are always rushing around the place. Just the other day at the student union I almost got run over by this guy on a skateboard. I was very startled by the boy and I didn’t know how to react, I am sure you can imagine my clumsy self trying to dodge a skateboard. First you have to understand what the student union feels like to me. It is swarming with people rushing around and it is almost impossible to walk without hitting someone. This is a given that if you are skateboarding, you are probably going to hit someone. Even though the student union is a huge space, it feels so incredibly small with all of the people around you. Anyway, the poor guy looked so embarrassed. I would have been to if I almost ate concrete in front of everyone! After the incident I started wondering… How many injuries are caused by skateboarders? I would think quite a few because that same day I saw skateboarders run into multiple walkers. I understand the campus is so big and spread out and a skateboard helps to be on time to class but I feel it’s not hard to look out for people who are walking. You might also be thinking… How do other people feel about this situation? My friend Kellsey said she felt annoyed at the situation because she almost got crushed twice in one day. Can you believe that? Just walking around and almost getting run over, not ONCE but TWICE in just one day. During the situation at the student union, I saw the faces of the passersby and noticed people weren’t surprised by the situation. I was wondering how many other people this occurred to so I began asking people in my English class. Multiple people said they have experienced being chased off the sidewalk by skateboarders. In one case, someone had tire marks on their foot. Then I started thinking… When this situation happens, who is at fault? It’s hard to say because the sidewalk is for everyone. Skateboarders should look out for walkers because sometimes they come right from behind you so the walkers can’t see them. Skateboarders could give a warning instead of creeping up for behind you. I feel sometimes they scare you on purpose. I was thinking, is there a fix to this problem? Could there be a division in the sidewalk for walkers and skateboarders? In some places there is a different section of the road for bicycles could there be added room for skateboarders? I think if there was a fix to this problem, this would be the way to fix it. UCF couldn’t ban skateboarding, people have to be able to get around someway and it would be very unfair to say skateboarders couldn’t get around the way they choose. Don’t forget, UCF is a very spread out campus and walking from one end to the other takes a while.
Tuesday, October 6, 2009
250 Words on the problem between skateboarders and walkers.
As I stood in front of the Student Union, waiting to meet my best friends Megan and Jenna, I noticed the Student Union was bustling with people. I then noticed a guy on a skateboard coming straight towards me. I didn’t know if I should move or stand still. If I moved, he might move the same way and we would either do that awkward shuffle where both people keep going the same way or he could run into me. If I stayed still he might move and NOT hit me or he would run into me. I choose to take a step back hoping he would keep going straight. He must have gotten spooked when he saw me because he ended up jumping off of his skateboard and almost face planting into the concrete. I felt bad because he looked like he was embarrassed but, what was I supposed to do? I only noticed him when he was so close to me that I really didn’t know how to react. I don’t really understand why he was skateboarding around the student union because it was crammed with people. I never could imagine UCF seeming so small but when it’s packed with people buzzing around like bees swarming a bee hive, it looks and feels so tightly packed, to me at least. Everyone being in such a rush reminds me of a summer day in high school when everyone was walking to their car, it started pouring and everyone started running trying to stay dry. Back to the Student Union situation, I noticed a person around me acting nervous, as if they would be the next one who would be hit with a skateboard. The skateboarders friends was laughing at him for the fall he had taken. Some people looked like they felt bad for the kid. The skateboarder gave me a bad look but I feel that it wasn’t really my fault. Maybe it was no one’s fault. We can’t read minds and we didn’t know how to react to the situation.
This experience was significant for me because I learned to watch out for skateboarders ahead of time. I hope this experience was significant for the skateboarder and I hope he doesn’t skateboard in crowded places again.
This experience was significant for me because I learned to watch out for skateboarders ahead of time. I hope this experience was significant for the skateboarder and I hope he doesn’t skateboard in crowded places again.
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